I've created a monster!!!!!

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Lawd!! Too much happening ere! i kinda started feeling bad for Delmar when im bredda kick im inna deh face. Ohhhh, mi nah like deh violence, so me get scared feh Delmar. Den Fitz haffi comfort im ded bredda.....Lawd mi cyaan tek ie! Den, ian ah show hup agen!! All mi haffi seh is, mi fadda would not let mi guh tuh Ian alone!

All this foolishness cause crazy rass Mya wan feh rooks deh twins dem! An har still nah kno who har baby daddy do she?

I feel you on the violence...but I'm trying to touch on a little of everything. Hush puttus...ie soon gwaan. Remember Melodee just got pregnant by Ian. She and Delmar thought that she was the reason they couldn't have a child together. Melodee got rid of Tradee's baby, not Delmar's when they were in school.

*Hint* Delmar is shooting blanks

You are absolutely brilliant, execellent, I have read anything this good in years WAY to MTFUKING GO!!!!! I am soo proud of you...(spoken as if I'm somebody who makes a difference well I do, but u know what I mean)

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WooHoo!! that is a funny sight...having ian hol on den fall off!! haha!! mi needed that one laff!

yuh kno, mi such a softy, cause mi feel sarry feh errybaddy inna dis ere singting. Mel, Delmar and Ian too.

ole heap ah duppy dun dere..yup-yup, yup-yup

Yeah dat was pretty funny....me too; they are all jus misunderstood, yeah dats et: they'll all be ok once dem get some much needed counceling to deal wit all dem issues

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Tradee slams his fist into Ian’s face with a nasty right hook.

DWL....Mi dead, mi dead, mi dead .....that was too funny.. Short and straight to the point and way over due

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ok, this baby have mi a way..why I started crying oH MY GOSH...!! mi cyant even ketch up now..mi soooo tired..mi will read tomorrow night everyone

I'm soo emotional Toya love for Fits....my God jus wonderful. Jus like mi luv for mi husbond. I agree..Jawi you deserve a standing ovation (sp)

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Morning all...Dimps wah gwaan mi si u

Bwoy I feel so bad fo the girls and their husbands Gosh, why Frowzy affi dead...dyam madd Delmar

Jawi I agree with everyone, your writing is so fantastic you would think that you have done this before. I have my boss telling to tell u to go get it published she LOVES your story I have to print for her every morning I come in ..baby ur fantastic u keep up the good work..mi love u long time

MI DAH YA!

I feel bad fi dem too.....I hope they don't turn pon Travis because ah him twin.

I can't stop praise Jawi her work! I told my cousin about the story and when it's completed I told her I would print it out for her so she can read it since this is 2klove and di gyal don't have a computer

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Mya: TRAVIS!!! BABY NO!! NO!!!! PLEASE TRAVIS! You are going to kill him. Baby think about me and our baby. Please Travis, he isn’t worth it. Come on Travis baby. Please don’t. Let the police put him behind bars. Don’t give up your life for his. Your brother needs help.

Tradee falls to the ground sobbing. He is breathing hard from the physical exertion that would permanently disfigure his twin. Mya kneels beside him, and cradles his head in her small arms. Tradee holds on to Mya as if his life force depends on it, and thunderous sobs rack his body. In what seems like eternity, but was in reality only 10 minutes, the police and ambulance arrive.

OOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, I can feel every little emotion they going through.

srry

Morning ladies

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Toya spots Mya and Tradee getting out of the car. Fitz remains in the car, staring straight ahead. He is covered in blood, and his face is streaked with tears. Toya picks up the hem of her wedding gown and begins running toward him, screaming. Tradee stops Toya, and holds her still.

Tradee: Toya, I need you to calm down. Fitz is not hurt. I have to tell you something very serious. Where is Fitz’s family?

Mya: T…calm down please. Fitz is okay. I promise. Baby, I’m so sorry.

Toya: Mommie…Daddy. Grandmummie! Come quick. Let me go Rasta. Fitz needs me.

Toya and Fitz’s parents and family run outside from the commotion.

Tradee: Fitz is okay. It’s Frowzy. Frowzy didn’t make it. He-he…Fr-Frowzy got shot. Im nuh mek ie!

Grandmummie: Dear Father GAWD! NO! No Father. Jesus Savior pilot mi!

Fitz and Frowzy’s mom: NOOOOOOOOO…nuh mi baby! Nuh mi baby! Where is my baby? Dear GAWD..whe mi pickney?

Toya’s mom runs to comfort Fitz’s mom, and Toya’s dad and Tradee run to catch Frowzy’s grandmother. Mya holds on to Toya.

Toya: Let me go Mya. I have to see Fitz. He needs me. He needs me. He needs me. Oh God, what happened My?

Mya: Fitz is not ready right now honey. He hasn’t said two words since…since…since it happened. He wouldn’t talk to the police, he wouldn’t talk to the ambulance staff. He has just been sitting in the same position. Let me help you change clothes honey. Then, we can go over and help Fitz. There is a lot of blood.

Toya: NO! I don’t give a damn about this dress! I need to get to my husband! LET ME GO!!! Fitz, I’m coming baby. Please let me go Mya. I don’t want to hurt you.

Mya releases Toya, and Toya runs to the car. Mya walks behind her, being careful not to interfere. Toya yanks open the car door, and she grabs Fitz’s hand.

Toya: Fitz honey. It’s me…Toya. I’m here. I’m here baby. I love you so much Fitz. Ba-baby can you talk to me? Come on, it’s okay. I love you. Oh baby…please talk to me.

Fitz: To-To-Toya. He killed him. He saved me and Rasta and Mya. Toya. I need my wife. I need Toya. Mummie…whe mi mummie? Doan tell Grandmummie. Ssshh. Granmummie tek wan rass cutlass tuh im headtop. Betta har nuh fe knoa.

Toya: I know honey. I know. Baby, do you think you can get out of the car now? Come on Fitz baby. Let me help you.

Fitz: I love you Toya. I miss my brother so much. Why did he leave me? Why did he leave? Toya, I never got the chance to tell him that I loved him. He saved my life. He saved all of our lives. Frowzy was a warrior baby. Toya, I need you. Damn baby, I need you to hold me. Just make it go away. Make it go away.

Toya: Okay baby. I love you too. I know you loved him. He loved you too. Frowzy knew you loved him Fitz. He knew it. Remember that. Hush baby. Come on, let’s get you out of the car. I’m going to hold on to you for eternity baby. I’m here. I’m here now.

Somebody help me get him out of the car! Rasta! Daddy!

Tradee: Mi got im sar. Please stay wid de oomen dem.

Tradee runs over to the car, and helps Fitz stand. Fitz blinks for the first time, seeing Toya in her white gown. She wipes at the tears flowing down her cheeks.

My heart breaks for Fitz and his family....... ( wait Marsha remeber itis just a storyy)

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Toya spots Mya and Tradee getting out of the car. Fitz remains in the car, staring straight ahead. He is covered in blood, and his face is streaked with tears. Toya picks up the hem of her wedding gown and begins running toward him, screaming. Tradee stops Toya, and holds her still.

Tradee: Toya, I need you to calm down. Fitz is not hurt. I have to tell you something very serious. Where is Fitz’s family?

Mya: T…calm down please. Fitz is okay. I promise. Baby, I’m so sorry.

Toya: Mommie…Daddy. Grandmummie! Come quick. Let me go Rasta. Fitz needs me.

Toya and Fitz’s parents and family run outside from the commotion.

Tradee: Fitz is okay. It’s Frowzy. Frowzy didn’t make it. He-he…Fr-Frowzy got shot. Im nuh mek ie!

Grandmummie: Dear Father GAWD! NO! No Father. Jesus Savior pilot mi!

Fitz and Frowzy’s mom: NOOOOOOOOO…nuh mi baby! Nuh mi baby! Where is my baby? Dear GAWD..whe mi pickney?

Toya’s mom runs to comfort Fitz’s mom, and Toya’s dad and Tradee run to catch Frowzy’s grandmother. Mya holds on to Toya.

Toya: Let me go Mya. I have to see Fitz. He needs me. He needs me. He needs me. Oh God, what happened My?

Mya: Fitz is not ready right now honey. He hasn’t said two words since…since…since it happened. He wouldn’t talk to the police, he wouldn’t talk to the ambulance staff. He has just been sitting in the same position. Let me help you change clothes honey. Then, we can go over and help Fitz. There is a lot of blood.

Toya: NO! I don’t give a damn about this dress! I need to get to my husband! LET ME GO!!! Fitz, I’m coming baby. Please let me go Mya. I don’t want to hurt you.

Mya releases Toya, and Toya runs to the car. Mya walks behind her, being careful not to interfere. Toya yanks open the car door, and she grabs Fitz’s hand.

Toya: Fitz honey. It’s me…Toya. I’m here. I’m here baby. I love you so much Fitz. Ba-baby can you talk to me? Come on, it’s okay. I love you. Oh baby…please talk to me.

Fitz: To-To-Toya. He killed him. He saved me and Rasta and Mya. Toya. I need my wife. I need Toya. Mummie…whe mi mummie? Doan tell Grandmummie. Ssshh. Granmummie tek wan rass cutlass tuh im headtop. Betta har nuh fe knoa.

Toya: I know honey. I know. Baby, do you think you can get out of the car now? Come on Fitz baby. Let me help you.

Fitz: I love you Toya. I miss my brother so much. Why did he leave me? Why did he leave? Toya, I never got the chance to tell him that I loved him. He saved my life. He saved all of our lives. Frowzy was a warrior baby. Toya, I need you. Damn baby, I need you to hold me. Just make it go away. Make it go away.

Toya: Okay baby. I love you too. I know you loved him. He loved you too. Frowzy knew you loved him Fitz. He knew it. Remember that. Hush baby. Come on, let’s get you out of the car. I’m going to hold on to you for eternity baby. I’m here. I’m here now.

Somebody help me get him out of the car! Rasta! Daddy!

Tradee: Mi got im sar. Please stay wid de oomen dem.

Tradee runs over to the car, and helps Fitz stand. Fitz blinks for the first time, seeing Toya in her white gown. She wipes at the tears flowing down her cheeks.

My heart breaks for Fitz and his family....... ( wait Marsha remeber itis just a storyy)

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double post.....srrry

Edited January 30, 2008 by phatmadame81

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Lawd!! Too much happening ere! i kinda started feeling bad for Delmar when im bredda kick im inna deh face. Ohhhh, mi nah like deh violence, so me get scared feh Delmar. Den Fitz haffi comfort im ded bredda.....Lawd mi cyaan tek ie! Den, ian ah show hup agen!! All mi haffi seh is, mi fadda would not let mi guh tuh Ian alone!

All this foolishness cause crazy rass Mya wan feh rooks deh twins dem! An har still nah kno who har baby daddy do she?

I feel you on the violence...but I'm trying to touch on a little of everything. Hush puttus...ie soon gwaan. Remember Melodee just got pregnant by Ian. She and Delmar thought that she was the reason they couldn't have a child together. Melodee got rid of Tradee's baby, not Delmar's when they were in school.

*Hint* Delmar is shooting blanks

good looking Jawi..

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(((((Marsha)))))

how r u today ?

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I was really having second thoughts about introducing violence to our little story. But, Jancrow dem circling, and mi tink oonu nuh sekkle huntil violence and blood run red ar yuh get fe taste de authoress own blood. Fancy-dressed, blood thirsty Jancrows.

Mi bawl real yeyewata when mi likkle Frowzy loose im life. cha! SATISFIED? Mi his a lova not a fighta.

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I was really having second thoughts about introducing violence to our little story. But, Jancrow dem circling, and mi tink oonu nuh sekkle huntil violence and blood run red ar yuh get fe taste de authoress own blood. Fancy-dressed, blood thirsty Jancrows.

Mi bawl real yeyewata when mi likkle Frowzy loose im life. cha! SATISFIED? Mi his a lova not a fighta.

JAWI.....are you saving this story?

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Kim.Kim, how you amnd the baby? How Kimora?

I am good.......had to rush out of this office to deal with something...............

How you ladies holding?

Jawi tanks mi der..............if me nuh say it enough mek mi seh it again.........tonks.

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Kim.Kim, how you amnd the baby? How Kimora?

I am good.......had to rush out of this office to deal with something...............

How you ladies holding?

Jawi tanks mi der..............if me nuh say it enough mek mi seh it again.........tonks.

Hey girl..lawd which one di one a "road" is still mi "monster" and di one inna belly a drive mi crazy wid dis cyan hold down nuttin wussa damn mi wid Kimora..oonuh muss tired fi mi say it but lawd mi tired to AREADY !! cyan wait fi dis yah part over...when mi go to the doc Monday mi ago ask 'im fi dem pills him did gimme wid Kimora mi cyan bodda....long kissteet